@KarachuN Absolutely agree, it wasn't a personal project, it was the class anthology so classmates should be able to openly give their critique (unless there's some cultural context I'm missing). But maybe that's the point. I'm hoping the direction this story takes is a journey of her learning...
actually, I finished reading this one on otakumole a while ago. although it's a bit tricky to work out if you're not used to it and it's basically reading raws and mousing over the speech bubbles to see translations. Has up to chapter 180.