@Tsikot no need to apologize its clearly visable that you tried and did pretty well all you lack is experience and the wording is mainly just me i kinda learned english while watching tv which allowed me to develop natural understanding of the sentence structure and things like that like when i...
much better then the other translation thou there is still some basic english mistakes here and there and maybe change the wording araund in a couple of places to make it sound more natural but pretty good job