@leadrous That's good to hear.... I also learned some things so thanks
Wait.... 15 is still misspelled ( it says "undoubtebly")
The same goes for page 16.
It's "undoubtedly." not "undoubtebly" i believe
@antivenomz I would describe it as plot armor that's too strong for other characters to handle. Even though most of the time he wins, he is overpowered in this point of the story, everyone loses to him (well not everyone, since that would pretty much be a boring story, to most people i believe)...
now figure out how to duplicate sequences and perform the action in under 10 seconds. oh and do it without saying it. and figure out how to make it work on paper and use delays. Also figure out how to make machines do it and automate it, and figure out how to affect photons using magic. then...
@Nighthawlc These are suggestions, so not all of them are correct, so that's new to me. but there's the other corrections so... yeah. I'll keep that in mind later on
@leadrous Here are some suggestions that i think might improve the chapter:
Page 8:
"What materials where you looking for?"
- Change to
"What materials were you looking for?"
Page 9: instead of "technique dismantling" use "spell dismantling"? cuz it's magic the thing is used against...
wait why is this emotional even though it seems like this guy just appeared in this one chapter? why did the author suddenly decide to show a character like this now????? there was no foreshadowing or anything that led up to this
in the previous chapters. What the fu- i don't understand this.