@ClarkDePio on page 11, you said “Fiance”, the word is actually “Fiancée” if you’re referring to a woman and “Fiancé” if you’re referring to a man. The accent on the E effects the pronunciation
@DerpySausage Doughnuts under a crescent moon is the official English name. That aside, I think the official name flows better, but that’s just a subjective opinion
@AlexEliot on page 21 it should say something like, "Alvar, that shalt be thy name, thou who hast no name" but I think it reads better like this "Thou who hast no name. Alvar, that shalt be thy name" or maybe "Thou wouldst/wilt be named Alvar"
you could also say "thou who hast not a name"
@Codecy on page 10 - it should just say "art thou blessed", not "blesseth". The -eth ending is used in the 3rd person singular (He/She). In this context blessed would be pronounced bless-id or bless-ed (depending on your accent)
Alternatively, you could say "beest thou blest?" or "art thou...
@casteryvan the text in the second last speech bubble of page 14 reads weirdly. I think it should be something more like "Wait a minute! Did I just go through the monitor?" or "Wait a minute! Did I just go through the computer screen?"
@buddhaofweebism I think there's an error on page 17 when Char says "I can't let dear brother to be preoccupied", did you mean "be too preoccupied", or possibly "become preoccupied"?