@krudmuphin
Tempting as the idea may be, my job keeps me pretty busy, so I don't know if I'd be able to help out with any regularity. I think I'll just stick to tapping you on the shoulder in the comments sections.
Page 13: You got it spelled as fininsh.
Page 29: Got an its that needs to be it's, bottom-center.
Page 31: All right, I can't rib you too much for this one because I see this mix-up frequently, but you don't sew seeds, you sow them.
504th hype is real.
Page 6: Needs to be "were all of you eavesdropping" instead of "we're."
Page 7: Not as glaring, but probably should be "then the Flight Lieutenant is already". Or leave out the "the" and add the name Deblanc.