God, if you spent 12 hours on proofreading, how about installing a spellchecker first? The typesetting looks decent so I'll assume you actually put efforts in and this is not a troll attempt so here are some constructive comments:
- Yes, please run your translation through a grammar...
@Darker444 https://pastebin.com/jJWaABwX
a bit makeshift but this is what I'm using. use with tampermonkey or greasemonkey or any userscript addon for your browser.