The names are kinda foreign, as I've never read anything in Vietnamese. and I'm used to reading right to left. but other than that the story seems solid so far.
Our Father, who art in heaven, hallowed be thy name; thy kingdom come; thy will be done on earth as it is in heaven. Give us this day our daily bread; and forgive us our trespasses as we forgive those who trespass against us; and lead us not into temptation, but deliver us from evil.
It's pretty bad. The author should have just made it into hentai.
Even if we ignore the extreme degeneracy, it has no substance without the Extreme Lewdness. You could say its meant to be insulting or that its a metaphor. But if its a metaphor, it's a shitty one. And if it's meant to be...