Thanks for the release!
The story is....meh. Gutter would be one word to describe it, but I'm largely indifferent towards it now... I think the teacher getting actually involved with them kinda tipped it over the "whatever" line for me. So this new chick wanting to actually have sex is more of...
@ChocoPark - periods are always preferred. Makes it easier to see if a sentence is supposed to end, or continue into the next bubble (my work usually has us using an ellipsis at the end of one that's continued into another one. "That's what..." "...she said." but the ellipsis thing is up to...
@ChocoPark lol, ahh. Hello proofreader! \o
Some of the mistakes I noticed on my first read through were the following:
Page 2: haven't looked at the JP raw so I can't say that they're different, but it could easily be a copy/paste error...but the text "But sometimes he's just a bit...
Thank you for the chapters! :D Always appreciate the effort. I hope I can give some nitpicky, friendly advice for some things I noticed :D (I'm an editor for irl work, so it's an unfortunate habit I have now since it's literally my job to nitpick things...)
Page 7, panel 2, first bubble: "That...
Can confirm with what Guspaz said... "thou" is an old form of "you". The old/archaic way of referring to yourself is still "I".
I, me, my/mine
thou, thee, thy/thine
What Tairo posted should work. "I have come to talk with thee/ye for a bit."
That girl's "logic" is hilarious and completely realistic of a drunk girl with suppressed feelings for someone...
THINGS WILL BE MORE AWKWARD BETWEEN US IF YOU LEAVE NOW!
(I know what'll make things less awkward!) <grabs his dick to stop him from leaving>
Page 5's TL note: @Scheibkerl For what it's worth, I think that saying "ehhh, I don't know about that." would've been perfectly fine there. "When did we become friends? I don't know about that..." (not "I don't know" literally, as in that's something he's ignorant of, but instead it's more "I...
That drop of water on Page 14...lmao. Looks like they took the "totally censoring this but not really" stuff that the To-Love-Ru artist does, and turned it up to 50!
idk too much about what the drama is about, but a discord screenshot of you saying "you guys are just a bunch of kids being f*ggots"... that's not the kinda shit anyone should be saying once they're past like the age of 16.
Also, @Hootanic what's wrong with the official translation? So what if the accent isn't as noticeable... like o'muhgosh that's totally like gonna ruin our immersion and totes ruin the story for us ya know?
Do you REALLY need the characters to speak like that in order to properly enjoy the story?
Thanks for the chapter! One suggestion though, if I may @GxyLxrd313: There's a blank speech bubble on page 7. Top left panel, the bubble is on her forehead (above her eyebrow)
Her her tits gotten bigger? I don't remember them being as huge as they are at the end there. Maybe it's the change to showing the volume 2 cover (instead of showing the volume 1 one) that's making it more obvious...but damn!