I hope that it stays roughly as dark as it is, maybe dipping a little darker in some parts. Mostly cuz I just don't like stuff that us overbearingly grim dark, it's so off putting.
i hate misunderstandings as much as the next person, but dont get to carried away, IRL the vast majority of conflict is from misunderstanding or shitty communication clouded by emotions. in other words its depressingly realistic to have a story start from misunderstandings.
is there a reason for the cardnal guy to be a jerk or is it just him actually being a terrible person.
also 16 year olds are notoriously arrogant what the hell this guy talking about 'suspicious behavior'.
i get that its for a joke and that its certainly not intended to be rape, but hauling a girl off to have sex while she says "no no no" is like what rape looks like.
I'm not having that much trouble following, I'm having trouble with names but faces are fine.
That being said I think this one should time skip to random point in college and the further to her career then end, I think it's about time to wind it down. Just get her a job, responsibilities, and...