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Pachka84 Joined May 28, 2018 Messages 2,208 Aug 4, 2019 #2 This is rather boring. The heroines can't even defend themselves. One of them is depicted as a total loser. There is no story to speak of. When your readers want to get through the story so they can read the intermissions you've got a big problem.
This is rather boring. The heroines can't even defend themselves. One of them is depicted as a total loser. There is no story to speak of. When your readers want to get through the story so they can read the intermissions you've got a big problem.
whoamiagain Joined Nov 23, 2019 Messages 1,094 Mar 4, 2020 #3 poor guy, he's depressing me and this is a story with Yun Yun in it