Good translation overall, but I wish you wouldn't make the mc address him as "loser".
I get that is isn't easy to translate the meaning of 貴様, but that's going from addressing him unrespectfully to flatly insulting him.
As other comments mentioned, it feels a bit weird.
I get that is isn't easy to translate the meaning of 貴様, but that's going from addressing him unrespectfully to flatly insulting him.
As other comments mentioned, it feels a bit weird.
