The World of Lilith - Ch. 3 - Don’t say anything if you don’t know what you’re talking about
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@Ruben_Cas if you need a proofreader it's best to get discord, where many interested people can contact you~
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Thank you for advicing me, that's very much appreciated !
And do you mean put a discord profile on the credit page, or literally search a proofreader on some discord servers ?
If that's the latter, well, I would prefer if it's someone who is already reading this story and loves it, to be honest. That's why I'm asking inside the chapter. As I would be quite sure that it would be done in the best of their capabilities.
Maybe I'm asking for too much, ahah...
However, I'll ask you, is my English that bad in the chapter ? I hope it is at least understandable...
Oh, and while I'm at it, what did you think about it in general ? (I mean the story and such ((because I know that my cleaning/redrawing can ruin reading experience, and I deeply apologize for it, ugh...)))
Thanks again for these kind words of information ! @Gurgling
And do you mean put a discord profile on the credit page, or literally search a proofreader on some discord servers ?
If that's the latter, well, I would prefer if it's someone who is already reading this story and loves it, to be honest. That's why I'm asking inside the chapter. As I would be quite sure that it would be done in the best of their capabilities.
Maybe I'm asking for too much, ahah...
However, I'll ask you, is my English that bad in the chapter ? I hope it is at least understandable...
Oh, and while I'm at it, what did you think about it in general ? (I mean the story and such ((because I know that my cleaning/redrawing can ruin reading experience, and I deeply apologize for it, ugh...)))
Thanks again for these kind words of information ! @Gurgling
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Oh hullo. @Ruben_Cas
Yes I think you should put the contact for discord at the end of the chapter. Someone who's interested might be more willing if there's an easy contact.
What do I think?
Overall I'm really interested in the story it looks great and the art is nice too.
I think you're doing AMAZING for someone who isn't a native English speaker and is doing this by themselves.
Let's see.. It's understandable but here's my input:
*Title should've been 'Don't say' not 'Don't tell'
*I also think that if you put the text sideways try to keep them all the same direction, instead of some facing left and some facing right.
*Many of the text is also small, it doesn't fill the bubble nicely
*There was a part where she says 'Do they talk about.. Me?' it would've felt more natural to say 'Are they talking about.. Me?'
*'Make someone run errands for you.. Still not willing to pay her..?' should prolly be
'Making someone run errands for you.. But you're unwilling to pay her..?'
*'I'll just give it later!' prolly sounds better as 'I'll be paying it later!' or 'I'll pay it back later!'
Small things like these are your errors because literal translations don't always come across properly.
I think it's fine overall and I like your use of color at certain times in the chapter!
I also like the translation notes you put so we know the sign meanings and the messages you leave at the end are nice.
If you'd like to keep messaging don't hesitate to reply.
What do I think?
Overall I'm really interested in the story it looks great and the art is nice too.
I think you're doing AMAZING for someone who isn't a native English speaker and is doing this by themselves.
Let's see.. It's understandable but here's my input:
*Title should've been 'Don't say' not 'Don't tell'
*I also think that if you put the text sideways try to keep them all the same direction, instead of some facing left and some facing right.
*Many of the text is also small, it doesn't fill the bubble nicely
*There was a part where she says 'Do they talk about.. Me?' it would've felt more natural to say 'Are they talking about.. Me?'
*'Make someone run errands for you.. Still not willing to pay her..?' should prolly be
'Making someone run errands for you.. But you're unwilling to pay her..?'
*'I'll just give it later!' prolly sounds better as 'I'll be paying it later!' or 'I'll pay it back later!'
Small things like these are your errors because literal translations don't always come across properly.
I think it's fine overall and I like your use of color at certain times in the chapter!
I also like the translation notes you put so we know the sign meanings and the messages you leave at the end are nice.
If you'd like to keep messaging don't hesitate to reply.
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Hi, @Gurgling !
As I totally agreed with what you were suggesting me, I took your advices to heart and modified some things in the chapter ! Thanks a lot for taking your time to say this !
I hope reading it is now a little more enjoyable, and smooth.
I also added my discord profile, as I didn't see any problem doing it.
About the colour, I just followed what the author did, ahah, I'm afraid to say that I wouldn't dare to add myself some colors to the text, as It is not my work.
I prefer to respect what the author did and did not with her/his own work. I'm just here to translate it to whoever can't read chinese, after all.
But again, thanks for your kind words ! You're helping me a lot !
I hope I will see you in the next chapter too !
As I totally agreed with what you were suggesting me, I took your advices to heart and modified some things in the chapter ! Thanks a lot for taking your time to say this !
I hope reading it is now a little more enjoyable, and smooth.
I also added my discord profile, as I didn't see any problem doing it.
About the colour, I just followed what the author did, ahah, I'm afraid to say that I wouldn't dare to add myself some colors to the text, as It is not my work.
I prefer to respect what the author did and did not with her/his own work. I'm just here to translate it to whoever can't read chinese, after all.
But again, thanks for your kind words ! You're helping me a lot !
I hope I will see you in the next chapter too !
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