Decent translation. "I left it as is" is generally a bad policy. Never rely on your reader being as familiar with Japanese as you are.
The goal of a translation is to convey the original meaning without taking the reader out of the story because they're reminded this is not the original...
@NotYourFuta It is colorism and it's integral to the plot, but if everything in her life is automatically better now it's validating the discrimination she's gone through. A good solution would have been that after everything that happened she chooses to have her skin tone return to its original...
Good thing they're already in the bath, but you're suppose to get in after washing up.
Everyone's freaking out, but all he said was "it was love at first site." I admit it's a bit awkward to reminsce about meeting a little girl while she's in the middle of blowing you.
@SuperOniichan What are you basing this on? The term appears in children's media without anyone batting an eye. It seems pretty synonymous with drag queen as a general term for the subculture.