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2 chapters in a short span?
This is too good to be true. I can only guess Skeleton's dying soon.
 
For anyone looking for the other chapters, go to Jaimini's Box. Shea was being a dirtbag and ripping the chapters from them and posting them as his own.
 
Why are people still working on this? the author admitted he has no clue what to do with the story, it's not worth the effort.
 
It's a classic example of someone starting a story without a plan. Have a general outline and a few ideas, introduce some characters that won't ever return or make a difference, break your own convoluted world rules consistently, etc.

It was a good concept but it falls short when you have no idea what to do with it lmao. Still, it's fun for a braindead read through the Cyber-Dystopia-Kraken-KnightyMcSwole-CatLady arc. Compared to that hilarious bullshit, this feels lacking really
 
@RubyBoule The difference being that One piece arguably was always good, this thing fell off it's stride the second it started jumping all over the place instead of sticking with it's core concept of the main character dying until he eventually succeeds.

It was great at first, he'd make some progress and then fuck up and start over again, but the writer decided that wasn't good enough so they started switching through heroines, side characters, and story arcs until he found one he liked again.

Plus the power creep got out of hand almost immediately, The mc started getting thrown into people so far above his level that he couldn't do anything no matter what, The writer really wrote himself into a corner with that bit, because the only logical solution is to throw some deus ex machina in there to let the mc get away.

And that's not even really getting into the core problem which as I mentioned before was that the writer had absolutely no plan while writing, he was just throwing scenarios out each time and when it didn't work like he wanted he'd abandon it immediately by forcing the system to dump the mc into a whole new story without bothering to finish off the previous story line at all.
 

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