Goddess's Personal Doctor - Ch. 4

This mfer actually tried to hit him with a brick at school. Lol like what's the plan after that?
 
Just some feed back but there are some phrasing doesn't really work.
Ex. "From my personal experience since I was grown up,"
Instead leaving 'since I was grown up' out would let it flow slightly better
'From my personal experience, Dong tie and his gang will come back for more...'
Then again I don't know what the source material is saying so it might deviate a bit from the original meaning.
 

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