Iron Ladies - Ch. 338

Thx for the chapt...

In the end, what ruler did to his mass only God and they loyal follower knew...

Sometimes force need to control socials...
Free will is a myth (by meme)
 
Thanks for the chapter.
Yes, use that divine item as a nutcracker.
And what did people expect going to a country ruled by flys?
 
No problem. Personnaly i just don't want this to be droped, so thank you for your work.😉
 
Hey there, I'm not sure if you'll see this. I just want to thank you for your efforts while going through tough times. Please don't neglect your health, take care of your issues first, we can wait. Have a good weekend.
 
Massive improvement over the last chapter, but still a few weird sentences, so I'm suggesting some changes again:

pg 9 "fleed" should be "fled"

pg 10 "land" should probably be "state", "nation" or "country". Those refer to political structure and / or the people. There's some small differences between them too (nation: people that feel they belong together; state: political system only; country: everything within the borders). Though most people don't really make a difference between nation and country nowadays, except for split nations like Germany / Austria / Belgium / Tirol / Elsass or Northern / Main Ireland, and "nation within the nation" people like the "first nation" of the american natives.
"land" refers to the soil itself (and sometimes the plants, or land-bound gods or spirits). "powerful and supportive land" sounds like some leylines bullshit, which isn't the case here iirc.

pg 12 "regarding one's own definition": the "regarding" should probably be left out. Otherwise, the sentence would need to be"regarding one's own definition of good and evil, IT is of no importance..."
 

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