Isekai Ten’i-sha no My Pace Kouryaku-ki

Read the first chapter. Looks like MTL, we're not at the start which is nice but nothing crazy good about it so far. Looks average.

Already has the harem and the magic inventory.
 
This is so stupid. I want to cough blood. I want to trust Japanese Editors.. But C'mon.. The art can be put to better use.
 
my god my brain hurts from trying to correct the grammar mistakes whilst reading in silence
 
I think the group translating this is missing a proofreader, this kinda feels like it was translated to a diff language then to english ngl
 
The trope density of that first chapter is over 9000. I don't think turning off my brain is going to cut it for this one.
 
Isekai authors just don't get it.

Feel-gooderies are fine if they're done right. Write out some stuff. The point of a story is Plot, Conflict and Resolution.

What they do is throw out feel-gooderies without focusing on plot first.

The feel gooderies must feel like a rewarding thing, like if a pirate fell into an enemy ship, but fought his way out bloodied, and in the end, came victorious and got the treasure, that's plot development.

Isekais nowadays just scream:
"Hey big boob girl, you wanna read this, right?"

It's fine to make a self-insert feel good manga, as long as you start with the plight of the main character, the conflicts he face and not 'All's good and well, guys, by the way: here's boobs!'

It's the conviction of the main character, his struggle to become stronger, and that's what other people see in them that makes them want to care and stay with the main character.

Not this generic, "here, boobs!!" BS
 
My brain has been turned off for a full month since the lockdown and I still couldn’t get past page 1.
 
I feel this is "worthy" of the BINGO card:

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needs a lot of editing but overall a good read, if the sentences become coherent then i'll continue to read it and support this story
 
Let me guess, MC gets/starts with OP powers relative to everyone else, quickly obtains a 10/10 love interest which expands into a harem, all the girls remain madly in love with the MC forever even though he shows zero interest in them, all the villains are badly written and kick puppies for fun and every arc is the MC basically making girls wet as more and more girls throw themselves at him.

How close am I?
 

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