I hate how readable this is. Need a proofreader hard cause it reminds me of taco cat english, and needs dude who finds the pretty fonts cause font isnt pretty, but this is the least I've ever hated a "bad" translation in my life. I appreciate your work, you're competent and put effort in and it shows. The little bit of magic to make it perfect is missing but that's why there are entire groups of people doing free translations.
Still hope the original group doesn't get angry though, and if anything I'd be about you providing the regular group with your translations. They're decent enough.