With the pacing, isn't the introduction, the defeat, and the battle of the demon and dark mage too fast? They are supposed to be major chara right? Not just a mob
As far I understand in the WN Hiya was a female(?) with a very nasty tendency, but don't get me wrong i agreed with tseng explanation (few blocks below this)
After see the Fulio and Riss in their sweet time, she(?) took some others female to punish into another realm and became partially a male and studied the mating process with the victim
@megavirus hiya is genderless in both and because the english language has a hard time with sexually ambiguous characters it often means you need to just use "they, it , that, ect" witch is janky and sounds horrible or just pick one and hold to it. You see it often in other translated works and stories from all over.
@Sharkexpert12
Yes that's why I told I do agreed with @tseng
Was a sword(demon), do sword have gender?
It was just my personal feeling after reading the raw
@icarushector "they" wouldn't work well here, it would sound like the characters are avoiding "he" and "she" on purpose. A better strategy would be pronoun avoidance - somewhat similar to what the JP author did. It would require some rewrite though:
It seems that hethis demon came from that very castle
it would be more effective to keep himHiya around as an ally
but I only have myself to blame, for getting beaten by him!
It's funny how japanese manga keep pushing the idea of enemy becoming friend, it's almost like they try to convince and reassure the US (and the rest of the world) that they are definitely friend and not enemy anymore...
@Sharkexpert12 There's nothing janky about They. It's like saying there's something janky about 'you' which follows similar principles. Some people are just really stubborn against anything they're slightly not used to.
The only jank is if someone tries to make they follow the wrong rules. They are can be singular just like you are is, if you try saying they is/you is for example, it's janky, but not how it works regardless. The difference between 'is' speech and 'are' speech is more etymology based than anything.
Then that just leaves the argument that 'they is hard to tell apart when there's multiple people, are they talking singularly or plurally?' but frankly that's no more of an issue than 'she' while there's multiple women, or 'he' when there's multiple men. At that point you're really just better using someone's name if it needs to be explicitly identifying one person.
It's funny since in other/most languages like Japanese, non gendered language IS really hard, English is not the same though, some people are just stubborn against very old rules that are only coming into higher prominence now.