Chapter 1
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"super marTket"
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definitely, there is no "a" in that word
page 7
"Oh no, I guess not today" feels like something went wrong here
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"Maybe... these* are"
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"Understanding suddenly" is it supposed to be an incomplete sentence like page 7?
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"What would've happened if they hadn't found you" weird sentence,
"Or else would've been difficult" What? What would have been difficult??
"I guess its very sudden", weird sentence but I'd give it a passing mark if you get the apostrophe where it belongs.
"It seems to be that you have", I feel like I'm falling down a staircase reading this sentence
"[...] and you're a Spirit Orison it seems": You should avoid using "it seems" twice in the same phrase, in fact you should just drop "its seems" entirely from the 2nd part
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"Very rarely that a spirit and and* [...] apprear in the content [...]"
"It's not a secret. Actually its recorded" At no point earlier did anyone say that anything was a secret, so why is the doctor denying that it is a secret?
"Those thing", missing an "s" here since you're using plural
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"I can read and WITE"
"That's good. Now I can communicate in writing" I think the latter part would be better without the "now"
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"respone" missing an "s"
"The Spirit Caller", is this the Spirit Orison or this is something new? Spirit Caller is a better term if that's the case