Pacing is too slow, and story is too linear. You can use video game mechanics as a plot device, but give us a reason to be invested in this story. Seven is a wet blanket but the previous two party members were ok. The exposition on the elf is delivered in the worst possible way. The framing, the unreliable account, and Seven's foreknowledge make her suffering feel like a joke. Normally you would subvert expectation by making the character stray from the predicted story. This makes the character feel nuanced, but no you make them into a soulless marionette. Why would I care now?