This is a good story, but I still have a few issues
The first issue I have is the info dump near the end (talking about her acting like a delinquint in the past and so on) which is not very handled all things considered, second is the cut from the school to the hospital, it's a decent twist but it feels very lacking in development or build up.
But those things aside this is still a really good story and probably one of my favorite one-shots, 9/10
The first issue I have is the info dump near the end (talking about her acting like a delinquint in the past and so on) which is not very handled all things considered, second is the cut from the school to the hospital, it's a decent twist but it feels very lacking in development or build up.
But those things aside this is still a really good story and probably one of my favorite one-shots, 9/10
