SHIBUYA: Gal Yuri Anthology - Ch. 1 - Reverse line by Yorumo

[MangaDex]

 

[kiikun]

Too short

 

[Sabruness]

Extremely wholesome but too short QQ.

 

[Dragonaz]

More gyaru yuri is one step closer to world peace.

 

[BasedYuri]

Kinda difficult to understand translation, ngl.

"Because if you dress like this in the countryside, you'll be clean. It's plain and serious."

What does that mean? A lot of lines feels like the reader has to guess what the translator meant.

 

[jellyrolljunior]

I'm just gonna assume clean means alienated cuz I have no idea as well

 

[Babydel]

???

 

[Xr2]

@jellyrolljunior @BasedYuri Thanks for the feedback! I think I know where I got it wrong and I'll see if I can rewrite it to make more sense ...

 

[jonkk]

I didn't really get some things

 

[Xaelath]

My English broke

 

[Xr2]

I've uploaded a new revision

 

[Driplord]

More gyaru yuri is one step closer to world peace.

+1

 

[jellyrolljunior]

@Xr2
Wow I'm impressed at your willingness to take criticism. U got spunk

 

[Krune]

and they held hands for years to come after that day. Thank you for the upload, glad to see Pyon didn't let her dreams remain dreams.

 

[CatWEax]

@Xr2
Please translate the floating text outside or on the edge of bubbles too. If you can’t redraw that, placing the translation with sufficiently large stroking across it is still better than leaving it untranslated. Thanks.

 

[NeonWinter]

the glow up

 

[Ranzo]

This still kinda sounds wonky to me