Slow Starter

Have a potential to be more decent story but wasted because short story. In my personal opinion, well, what do you expect from a thot? Glad the male mc got hooked with female mc. Oh, you should try durian too, its has a strong smell but its delicious.
 
Nothing grand, and nothing bad. Worth a read since it has a unique take on the relationships of the characters, although it could definitely have used probably double the amount of chapters to truly flesh out the story and the delve into the relationship between the 3 main characters. Also they never truly expanded on the MC's best friend being 'afraid' of Kaoru which seems odd since it was planned to be a short story from the beginning I assume. Not having a twist on her story/character was a huge downside considering how much they were fluffing it up as an important twist.
 
if this was more it could be something! i liked it and since its only 8 chapters i would recommend it as a pleasant and fast read.
 
that didn't feel like the right ending at all, like half the story was missing.
 
It has a great premise. The basis of the story is well laid out but the story is way too short and lacking in terms of fleshing out the motivation and back stories of the 3 main characters and
why the kidnapper did what he did
. There is so much more story left to tell!
 

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