loving your work, though someone should tell the TS they're a bit overzealous with italics and other emphases. it loses its effect when it's used so often, giving it less impact at times when it would otherwise be necessary for the tone of the scene. the spacing itself is pretty good, and the extra special effects for the sound effects and onomatopoeias are a nice touch, so it's overall better quality than most small groups. the italics and such just stand out a bit too much, is all.