The Diary of a Middle-Aged Teacher's Carefree Life in Another World - Vol. 1 Ch. 1
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Dreamwork branching out to developing game in the future huh? lol
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"The priority of the gouvernement was to deal with the electricity issue. Like if the lifes of the civilians worth nothing to them"
Normal it is already dead, the priority is that there is no more death, a city without electricity there is nothing worse to risk lives.
And here we are talking about a country in the middle of nowhere, food, water, heating, security, ...
Normal it is already dead, the priority is that there is no more death, a city without electricity there is nothing worse to risk lives.
And here we are talking about a country in the middle of nowhere, food, water, heating, security, ...
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"The damn government focused on getting power back to 130 million people in the middle of the worst power blackout in human history where there's a large elderly population that is going to want heating/cooling and life saving medical care that requires this wonder thing called 'ELECTRICITY' over finding out how/why 12 people died/committed suicide(?)..."
Those god damned government leaders! How dare they prioritize health and safety of people that are still alive!
"The evil spirit that your friends and you has sealed will be free in a few years."
"His soul is blocked for now, somewhere inside your old world."
...Wait, what? What... the fuck? So... that monster spirit thingy that... he saw (mostly heard) for a few seconds is... back on Earth? Sealed away? And, what, he's going to wake up in Earth? How'd he get there? Why is he not in this new world the MC is in? This makes no god damn sense.
Can we get the manga were Earth militaries are pummeling the shit out of a knockoff Godzilla instead? Is it too much to ask to see a dragon or some monster get a tank cannon enema outside of GATE? Come on.
"Sadly... The evil spirit force your friends to commit suicide with his powers."
"Suicides? And I'm the responsable?"
And thenJohn was a zombie Satoshi was the responsable.
"When I found at that your friend were dead, I decided to teleport you in this world to save you."
"This world was created by me and my goddess friends based on the game that you love so much."
...This goddess is so useless that she puts Aqua to shame. Why the fuck would you go through so much effort to teleport someone, and CREATE AN ENTIRE NEW WORLD, rather than just, I dunno, stopping that monster or teleporting him somewhere else on Earth? Or just up in heaven or where ever with the gods and giving him a quick peptalk, maybe wipe his memories, whatever, and send him back? I mean, I guess the excuse of "but she's a goddess, brah" might get bandied about, but so what? Why go through that hassle?
Also, the tired old trope of "we can't send you back because you died" can't even be used here - he didn't die, his friends did. So... even less reason to do so, then.
Those god damned government leaders! How dare they prioritize health and safety of people that are still alive!
"The evil spirit that your friends and you has sealed will be free in a few years."
"His soul is blocked for now, somewhere inside your old world."
...Wait, what? What... the fuck? So... that monster spirit thingy that... he saw (mostly heard) for a few seconds is... back on Earth? Sealed away? And, what, he's going to wake up in Earth? How'd he get there? Why is he not in this new world the MC is in? This makes no god damn sense.
Can we get the manga were Earth militaries are pummeling the shit out of a knockoff Godzilla instead? Is it too much to ask to see a dragon or some monster get a tank cannon enema outside of GATE? Come on.
"Sadly... The evil spirit force your friends to commit suicide with his powers."
"Suicides? And I'm the responsable?"
And then
"When I found at that your friend were dead, I decided to teleport you in this world to save you."
"This world was created by me and my goddess friends based on the game that you love so much."
...This goddess is so useless that she puts Aqua to shame. Why the fuck would you go through so much effort to teleport someone, and CREATE AN ENTIRE NEW WORLD, rather than just, I dunno, stopping that monster or teleporting him somewhere else on Earth? Or just up in heaven or where ever with the gods and giving him a quick peptalk, maybe wipe his memories, whatever, and send him back? I mean, I guess the excuse of "but she's a goddess, brah" might get bandied about, but so what? Why go through that hassle?
Also, the tired old trope of "we can't send you back because you died" can't even be used here - he didn't die, his friends did. So... even less reason to do so, then.
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The problem here is the manga changed some stuff or the translator got some things wrong. I was curious so I discovered these points after skimming the first chapter of the web novel. All from Freya's initial message to MC after he awakes:
[ol]1) The evil being is an evil goddess and she was defeated by a hero over two thousand years prior on some other world and locked in the game world that somehow ended up on Earth for humans to play believing it to be just a game.
2) The evil goddess is still in the game world after MC and team beats her in the game. She is not in some obscure place on Earth according to Freya's message in the web novel.
3) The evil goddess self destructed (whatever that means) and caused the deaths of those that resealed her in the game world. (I got the impression MC also died in the web novel because the words reincarnate and resurrect are used in reference to what Freya did to MC). Edited to add: He did die, this is in the blurb for both the manga and web novel.
4) Freya pretty much makes him a "god" in the new world and gives him a bit more information than she does in the manga. While she still talks like an irresponsible ditz and whatever supposed pantheon was in charge of taking down the evil goddess was also irresponsible for somehow allowing the game she was sealed in to reach Earth (including Earth's so-called gods that she mentions), it seems she did MC a major favor in the web novel versus how she's portrayed in manga. Yet, MC for some reason is still fussing her out in his head, mostly for allowing the evil goddess prison game to be sent to Earth so humans could reseal her in the game.
5) She can't send him back or reincarnate him again cause she broke some rule among the deities when she did it the first time, but they were lenient because of his victory over evil goddess in the game although they voiced some complaints.
6) Also, her message in the web novel seems to indicate she did this for all the people that died on Earth at the hands of the evil goddess.[/ol]
[ol]1) The evil being is an evil goddess and she was defeated by a hero over two thousand years prior on some other world and locked in the game world that somehow ended up on Earth for humans to play believing it to be just a game.
2) The evil goddess is still in the game world after MC and team beats her in the game. She is not in some obscure place on Earth according to Freya's message in the web novel.
3) The evil goddess self destructed (whatever that means) and caused the deaths of those that resealed her in the game world. (I got the impression MC also died in the web novel because the words reincarnate and resurrect are used in reference to what Freya did to MC). Edited to add: He did die, this is in the blurb for both the manga and web novel.
4) Freya pretty much makes him a "god" in the new world and gives him a bit more information than she does in the manga. While she still talks like an irresponsible ditz and whatever supposed pantheon was in charge of taking down the evil goddess was also irresponsible for somehow allowing the game she was sealed in to reach Earth (including Earth's so-called gods that she mentions), it seems she did MC a major favor in the web novel versus how she's portrayed in manga. Yet, MC for some reason is still fussing her out in his head, mostly for allowing the evil goddess prison game to be sent to Earth so humans could reseal her in the game.
5) She can't send him back or reincarnate him again cause she broke some rule among the deities when she did it the first time, but they were lenient because of his victory over evil goddess in the game although they voiced some complaints.
6) Also, her message in the web novel seems to indicate she did this for all the people that died on Earth at the hands of the evil goddess.[/ol]
Max level everything MC punches tree in frustration.
Tree is fine. All hail tree-sama.
doesn't want to kill goblins 'just because they're monsters' which would be an admirable stance if they weren't also trying to shish kebab him.
also everything definition of insanity said.
Tree is fine. All hail tree-sama.
doesn't want to kill goblins 'just because they're monsters' which would be an admirable stance if they weren't also trying to shish kebab him.
also everything definition of insanity said.
lololololol.. ONCE AGAIN. Another cokcy MC who cant even say a thank you to a savior (in this case, the god) for salvaging his life and allowing him a 2nd chance to live on. Instead he wants to punch her in the face ? Another isekia ungrateful shithead. Not even to acknowledge with a nod.
These MCs are truely trash. Even if this story seems shit.
These MCs are truely trash. Even if this story seems shit.
@Velsy
Cool, so I guess you'll just ignore that the reason why he and a few others died in the first place was because the goddess was skiving off of her work? She was supposed to be the one to deal with that evil god, she just slap-dashed it and it fell on to some gamers to finish her job for her. I'd be pissed as all hell too.
Cool, so I guess you'll just ignore that the reason why he and a few others died in the first place was because the goddess was skiving off of her work? She was supposed to be the one to deal with that evil god, she just slap-dashed it and it fell on to some gamers to finish her job for her. I'd be pissed as all hell too.
honestly after reading this translation i can safely say that you could basically skip the entire chapter and would be possibly LESS confused about the plot, the translation is just so bad... and the PR so much needed D:... if someone has the raws or a link to them i might retranslate a script for it if someone wants to edit it in and what not... cuz this is such a LQ release xD
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A lot of nonsensical stuff right at the start. His life gets saved, but he gets mad and punches an invincible tree and claims the goddess's actions of saving his life is "treating people like objects"? His life before was crap anyway. And he's pretty quick to go slaughtering life himself. An unlikable mc.
The goddess said she and her friends created this world based on the game? Then how old is this world? Are the people real then? Was the world created for this d-bag mc?
The goddess said she and her friends created this world based on the game? Then how old is this world? Are the people real then? Was the world created for this d-bag mc?
Like many others have said the English is done very well for having no one with that as their first language on the team. I had the time and the inclination so I decided to help. Feel free to use or not use any of these suggestions. Some of them are small tweaks to make it flow well for a native speaker other's are a little more painful. You won't offend me if you don't end up using any these correction. Also, I'm not an English major or grammar Nazi so it may not always be 'proper English' but it will always sound more natural. Also, everything will be in American in English so you can deal with the difference between 'color' and 'colour.'
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Original-Damn... How many times this monster will regenerate itself?
Corrected- Damn... How many times will this monster regenerate itself?
I can't for the life of me think what VRRRPG stands for. Normaly it would just be VRRPG or even MMOVRRPG. However that's minor and seems difficult to mess up in translation
Original-Your own brain is the controller you'll need to play at this game.
Corrected-Your own brain is the controller you'll need to play this game.
In or with could also work but this feels the most natural to me
super minor but dozen should be dozens
Page 3
Original-My gamestyle own me the nickname of The Destroyer.
Corrected-My gamestyle has earned me the nickname of The Destroyer.
Like a lot of these this isn't the only way to put it. This one was just the first and closest to yours that came to me.
Also super minor, but damages sounds better as damage
Page 4
Lol, dude. Don't see that much anymore... Keep it ;-)
Original-Sorry, I also leave.
Corrected-Sorry, I'll also leave. or better yet Sorry, me too.
This one feels like the stereotypical grammar mistake that a non English speaker would make.
Original-Okay, we stop here for tonight.
Corrected-Okay, we'll stop here for tonight.
Gotta watch those contractions.
Page 5
Original-I was working as programmer before for a big compagny before.
Corrected-I was working as a programmer for a big company[b/] before.
This was one of the most awkward sentences. You could also move the 'before' from the end of the sentence to the beginning. Also, company was one of the few times you misspelled a word.
Original-That's why I play all day with my favorite video game.
Corrected-That's why I play all day in my favorite video game.
Better-That's why I play my favorite video game all day.
This one's minor. Your could also maybe use 'on', but it is a VR game. It'll sound even better using the last one.
Original-I didn't expect so many xp... I'll need to use all my new skill points.
Corrected-I didn't expect so much xp... I'll need to use all my new skill points.
It would also be fine to use 'many xp points.' Without the word points I guess it's seen as something not measured with numbers...? Don't ask me. English has a lot of idiosyncrasies.
Page 6
Orig-You who dare trying to seal me!
It still works since it's dramatized anyway, but it would sound better as:
Corr-You who dare to try and seal me!
Page 7
Original-all light in Japan vanished in the same time.
Corrected-all light in Japan vanished at the same time.
Original-A dozen of people were find dead at their homes.
Corrected-A dozen people were found dead in their homes.
'at their homes' is perfectly fine it just sounds better with 'in.' Also, It could be 'dozens of people' if your talking about multiple dozens.
Original-And nobody know why or how.
Corrected-And nobody knew why or how.
You had already established the past tense in the previous sentence. And also, just FYI because of mass cultural habit most people would use the word order 'how or why.' Its utterly meaningless though.
Original-Like if the lifes of the civilians worth nothing to them.
Corrected-As if the lives of the civilians were worth nothing to them.
These are just about the right prepositional phrases and the proper plural.
Page 8
Original-It look like the clothes we can find in the game.
Corrected-It looks like the clothes that can be find in the game.
You could also just replace we with you, since he's alone and proposing an abstract observation.
Page 9
This is minor but it could be better as "I've lost my mind for good" in the last bubble of frame one
TYPO
Orig-Statut
Corr-Status
Page 10
Original-Something wrong... Really wrong!
Corrected-Something's wrong... Really wrong!
Original-I never see those stats anywhere before.
Corrected-I never saw those stats anywhere before.
Original-Hi, I'm Megami-chan, there are some informations for you.
Corrected-Hi, I'm Megami-chan, there is some information for you.
Alternate-Hi, I'm Megami-chan, here is some information for you.
Page 11
"I have a bad feeling about this." Said in every Star Wars movie. Just a bit of free trivia.
Original-The evil spirit that your friends and you has sealed will be fee in a few years.
Corrected-The evil spirit that your friends and you have sealed will be free in a few years
Original-Sadly... The evil spirit force your friend to commit suicide with his powers.
Corrected-Sadly... The evil spirit forced your friends to commit suicide with his powers.
Original-Suicides?
Corrected-Suicide!?
Since he is just exclaiming what was already said you use what was already said. Also, you can combine exclamation with almost anything.
Original-And I'm the responsable?
Corrected-And I'm responsible!?
Alternate-And I'm the one responsible!?
I personally think the first correction is better but the second works.
Original-When I found at that your friends were dead, I decided to teleport you in this world to save you.
Corrected-When I found out that your friend were dead, I decided to teleport you to this world to save you.
Technically it should be my goddess friends and I but she IS a goddess and who cares!?
Page 12
Original-And you're also lucky that I was able to recover the data from your caracter to recreate you.
Corrected-And you're also lucky that I was able to recover the data from your characterto recreate you.
The next few sentences are a little awkward but could be left the way it is except can't is spelled wrong.
Original-Good luck to survive in this new world.
Corrected-Good luck surviving in this new world.
Original-I'll punch you so hard if I ever met you!
Corrected-I'll punch you so hard if I ever meet you!
Page 13
CONGRATULATIONS! NUMBER 13 WAS YOU LUCKY NUMBER! No corrections.
Page 14
none
Page 15
Original-This forest is a huge trap or what?
Corrected-Is this forest a huge trap or what?
It can be left as it is but it should be phrased as a question
Page 16
Original-They eat everything they can found.
Corrected-They eat everything they can find.
Alternate-They eat everything that can be found.
Page 17 Nada
Page 18 Zilch
Page 19 Nix
Page 20
Original-I didn't want to come this far.
Corrected-I didn't want to go this far.
Alternate-I didn't want to take it this far.
Original-Like if a missile explode on her face.
Corrected-Like if a missile exploded on her face.
Teensy, minor thing but is might be better in last bubble to have 'changed are giving me a headache.' However, it really doesn't need to changed
Page 21 Nope
Page 22
The note under frame one should be 'said' or 'says.'
Orig-duc
Corr-Duke
As other's have said, in English it's not duc but Duke Someone even said something about "grand duke" but I wouldn't know about that.
Original-Failure is not tolered.
Corrected-Failure is not tolerated.
Last bubble says 'in the right time' but it would be more natural to just say 'in time'
Page 23
Original-Destiny will play a funny trick to the girl who will meet a Great sage.
Corrected-Destiny will play a funny trick on the girl who will meet a Great Sage.
You play a trick 'on' not 'to.' Also, while we're at it the 's' but that one doesn't matter in the slightest.
UGH... That was more exhausting than I thought it would be. Anyways, you guys did well (or good to tick of grammar nazis). Most of your mistake related to Past or Present tense. The other major one was something called 'subject verb agreement.' It's when you add an 's' or whatever when the subject is plural. Most of these mistake would have caught with Grammarly or Microsoft Office.
Auf weder sehen.
P.S.- I know a little of a few different languages but french is one I know very little about.
PPS- I noticed that someone else took over the scanlation... But my corrections still stand since there is no other version submitted to mangadex.
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Original-Damn... How many times this monster will regenerate itself?
Corrected- Damn... How many times will this monster regenerate itself?
I can't for the life of me think what VRRRPG stands for. Normaly it would just be VRRPG or even MMOVRRPG. However that's minor and seems difficult to mess up in translation
Original-Your own brain is the controller you'll need to play at this game.
Corrected-Your own brain is the controller you'll need to play this game.
In or with could also work but this feels the most natural to me
super minor but dozen should be dozens
Page 3
Original-My gamestyle own me the nickname of The Destroyer.
Corrected-My gamestyle has earned me the nickname of The Destroyer.
Like a lot of these this isn't the only way to put it. This one was just the first and closest to yours that came to me.
Also super minor, but damages sounds better as damage
Page 4
Lol, dude. Don't see that much anymore... Keep it ;-)
Original-Sorry, I also leave.
Corrected-Sorry, I'll also leave. or better yet Sorry, me too.
This one feels like the stereotypical grammar mistake that a non English speaker would make.
Original-Okay, we stop here for tonight.
Corrected-Okay, we'll stop here for tonight.
Gotta watch those contractions.
Page 5
Original-I was working as programmer before for a big compagny before.
Corrected-I was working as a programmer for a big company[b/] before.
This was one of the most awkward sentences. You could also move the 'before' from the end of the sentence to the beginning. Also, company was one of the few times you misspelled a word.
Original-That's why I play all day with my favorite video game.
Corrected-That's why I play all day in my favorite video game.
Better-That's why I play my favorite video game all day.
This one's minor. Your could also maybe use 'on', but it is a VR game. It'll sound even better using the last one.
Original-I didn't expect so many xp... I'll need to use all my new skill points.
Corrected-I didn't expect so much xp... I'll need to use all my new skill points.
It would also be fine to use 'many xp points.' Without the word points I guess it's seen as something not measured with numbers...? Don't ask me. English has a lot of idiosyncrasies.
Page 6
Orig-You who dare trying to seal me!
It still works since it's dramatized anyway, but it would sound better as:
Corr-You who dare to try and seal me!
Page 7
Original-all light in Japan vanished in the same time.
Corrected-all light in Japan vanished at the same time.
Original-A dozen of people were find dead at their homes.
Corrected-A dozen people were found dead in their homes.
'at their homes' is perfectly fine it just sounds better with 'in.' Also, It could be 'dozens of people' if your talking about multiple dozens.
Original-And nobody know why or how.
Corrected-And nobody knew why or how.
You had already established the past tense in the previous sentence. And also, just FYI because of mass cultural habit most people would use the word order 'how or why.' Its utterly meaningless though.
Original-Like if the lifes of the civilians worth nothing to them.
Corrected-As if the lives of the civilians were worth nothing to them.
These are just about the right prepositional phrases and the proper plural.
Page 8
Original-It look like the clothes we can find in the game.
Corrected-It looks like the clothes that can be find in the game.
You could also just replace we with you, since he's alone and proposing an abstract observation.
Page 9
This is minor but it could be better as "I've lost my mind for good" in the last bubble of frame one
TYPO
Orig-Statut
Corr-Status
Page 10
Original-Something wrong... Really wrong!
Corrected-Something's wrong... Really wrong!
Original-I never see those stats anywhere before.
Corrected-I never saw those stats anywhere before.
Original-Hi, I'm Megami-chan, there are some informations for you.
Corrected-Hi, I'm Megami-chan, there is some information for you.
Alternate-Hi, I'm Megami-chan, here is some information for you.
Page 11
"I have a bad feeling about this." Said in every Star Wars movie. Just a bit of free trivia.
Original-The evil spirit that your friends and you has sealed will be fee in a few years.
Corrected-The evil spirit that your friends and you have sealed will be free in a few years
Original-Sadly... The evil spirit force your friend to commit suicide with his powers.
Corrected-Sadly... The evil spirit forced your friends to commit suicide with his powers.
Original-Suicides?
Corrected-Suicide!?
Since he is just exclaiming what was already said you use what was already said. Also, you can combine exclamation with almost anything.
Original-And I'm the responsable?
Corrected-And I'm responsible!?
Alternate-And I'm the one responsible!?
I personally think the first correction is better but the second works.
Original-When I found at that your friends were dead, I decided to teleport you in this world to save you.
Corrected-When I found out that your friend were dead, I decided to teleport you to this world to save you.
Technically it should be my goddess friends and I but she IS a goddess and who cares!?
Page 12
Original-And you're also lucky that I was able to recover the data from your caracter to recreate you.
Corrected-And you're also lucky that I was able to recover the data from your characterto recreate you.
The next few sentences are a little awkward but could be left the way it is except can't is spelled wrong.
Original-Good luck to survive in this new world.
Corrected-Good luck surviving in this new world.
Original-I'll punch you so hard if I ever met you!
Corrected-I'll punch you so hard if I ever meet you!
Page 13
CONGRATULATIONS! NUMBER 13 WAS YOU LUCKY NUMBER! No corrections.
Page 14
none
Page 15
Original-This forest is a huge trap or what?
Corrected-Is this forest a huge trap or what?
It can be left as it is but it should be phrased as a question
Page 16
Original-They eat everything they can found.
Corrected-They eat everything they can find.
Alternate-They eat everything that can be found.
Page 17 Nada
Page 18 Zilch
Page 19 Nix
Page 20
Original-I didn't want to come this far.
Corrected-I didn't want to go this far.
Alternate-I didn't want to take it this far.
Original-Like if a missile explode on her face.
Corrected-Like if a missile exploded on her face.
Teensy, minor thing but is might be better in last bubble to have 'changed are giving me a headache.' However, it really doesn't need to changed
Page 21 Nope
Page 22
The note under frame one should be 'said' or 'says.'
Orig-duc
Corr-Duke
As other's have said, in English it's not duc but Duke Someone even said something about "grand duke" but I wouldn't know about that.
Original-Failure is not tolered.
Corrected-Failure is not tolerated.
Last bubble says 'in the right time' but it would be more natural to just say 'in time'
Page 23
Original-Destiny will play a funny trick to the girl who will meet a Great sage.
Corrected-Destiny will play a funny trick on the girl who will meet a Great Sage.
You play a trick 'on' not 'to.' Also, while we're at it the 's' but that one doesn't matter in the slightest.
UGH... That was more exhausting than I thought it would be. Anyways, you guys did well (or good to tick of grammar nazis). Most of your mistake related to Past or Present tense. The other major one was something called 'subject verb agreement.' It's when you add an 's' or whatever when the subject is plural. Most of these mistake would have caught with Grammarly or Microsoft Office.
Auf weder sehen.
P.S.- I know a little of a few different languages but french is one I know very little about.
PPS- I noticed that someone else took over the scanlation... But my corrections still stand since there is no other version submitted to mangadex.
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(*Sarcasm Warning This is not a drill this is sarcasm*)
10 Random Poeple Die
Goverment: We must investigate this right away.
Living poeple: But we need electricity.
Goverment: but we neeed to think of the poeple.
Living poeple: Poeple are dying in hospitals in a few hours when the generators go out.
Goverment: But the random Deaths need to be investigated.
I dont know if the mangaka really tought about the statement on page 7 because a goverment that thinkgs like above is and idiot.
Luckily some other poeple also noticed this.
1.Very limited emergency services.
2.Economic Crisis might happen(Cause airports, Harbors, Trains, office's, ETC dont work)
3. Poeple without heating or cooling.
just 3 quick examples why the power grid of a WHOLE Country are more important then 10 Random Suicide's.(Also its the polices job to investigate this not the goverment as a whole)
10 Random Poeple Die
Goverment: We must investigate this right away.
Living poeple: But we need electricity.
Goverment: but we neeed to think of the poeple.
Living poeple: Poeple are dying in hospitals in a few hours when the generators go out.
Goverment: But the random Deaths need to be investigated.
I dont know if the mangaka really tought about the statement on page 7 because a goverment that thinkgs like above is and idiot.
Luckily some other poeple also noticed this.
1.Very limited emergency services.
2.Economic Crisis might happen(Cause airports, Harbors, Trains, office's, ETC dont work)
3. Poeple without heating or cooling.
just 3 quick examples why the power grid of a WHOLE Country are more important then 10 Random Suicide's.(Also its the polices job to investigate this not the goverment as a whole)
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