Hi I just have a quick question do you really need a group of people to form a “group” because I can maybe translate this on my own and clean up and what not,
@Lennyface
You may want to consider combining partial chapters into one whole chapter, or at least a batch release (i.e. 4.1+4.2+4.3+4.4+4.5+4.6 ---> chapter 4).
You can expect to get a fair amount of feedback on many things after you've released some chapters.
I appreciate that mc has a weak (unspoken) connection to his mom where as everyone else as a clear reason to their initial problem between mother and daughter, makes the main conflict more uncertain of he’ll become a better son and accept his mother rather than feeling inferior and toxic competition.